Many cities have vehicle-free day, which encourages citizens to take bus, cycle or take taxi to go out. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Some Countries Some major cities Have an event each year
that is
personal transport
free day which influences the use of bus cycle or private transport
this
is a good awareness programmed
for their people in Change the form of the verb
program
this
statement, I am sure about getting more benefits than disadvantages which are described in below with an example.
My foremost Stand of
Change preposition
on
this
topics
, Fix the agreement mistake
topic
if
one day Add a missing verb
is if
in
each year the public Change preposition
apply
try
to leave their vehicle in their home and use public Correct subject-verb agreement
tries
transport
it's greatly beneficial to the economy and environment, economically if we discuss huge financial collection will be generated on that event day because all the people using public transport
on the other hand
, environmentally, minimum vehicles on the Road leads to low pollution in the city and gets relief from traffic consumption.
My second stands explain that fewer vehicles on roads minimize
accidents
Correct subject-verb agreement
minimizes
Hence
cities' hospitals will get relief from accident patients because of that government hospital manpower and supplies will save more rather than on other days. if we look at other ways the disadvantage is an increase in the
crowd
on public Add an article
the crowd
transport
Add the comma(s)
, as well as people suffering to reach their work on time and the taxi hiring rate,
as well as
people suffering to reach their work on time and the taxi hiring rate will more because of demands of the transportation.
In summary Implementation of this
event by the Government has more advantages than drawbacks government can generate more revenue and our climate atmosphere gets
less effect Verb problem
be
from
fuel emission gases.Change preposition
by
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