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Many cities have vehicle-free day, which encourages citizens to take bus, cycle or take taxi to go out. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some Countries Some major cities Have an event each year
that is
 personal
transport
 free day which influences the use of bus cycle or private
transport
this
 is a good awareness
programmed
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 for their people in
this
 statement, I am sure about getting more benefits than disadvantages which are described in below with an example. My foremost Stand
of
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this
topics
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,
if
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 one day
in
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each year the public
try
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 to leave their vehicle in their home and use public
transport
 it's greatly beneficial to the economy and environment, economically if we discuss huge financial collection will be generated on that event day because all the people using public
transport
on the other hand
, environmentally, minimum vehicles on the Road leads to low pollution in the city and gets relief from traffic consumption. My second stands explain that fewer vehicles on roads
minimize
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 accidents
Hence
 cities' hospitals will get relief from accident patients because of that government hospital manpower and supplies will save more rather than on other days. if we look at other ways the disadvantage is an increase in the
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 on public
transport
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, as well as people suffering to reach their work on time and the taxi hiring rate,
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as well as
 people suffering to reach their work on time and the taxi hiring rate will more because of demands of the transportation. In summary Implementation of
this
 event by the Government has more advantages than drawbacks government can generate more revenue and our climate atmosphere
gets
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 less effect
from
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 fuel emission gases.
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