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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table illustrates the information on unemployment in England, who spent their leisure time on different types of activities
last
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 year.
Overall
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, the data is given in percentages, and it is split into two genders, boys and girls. In general, It is obvious
see
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to see
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 that both genders spend most of the time in the morning on job hunting and
housework
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, afternoon watching TV and
housework
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. Starting from the male's morning and afternoon routine. Men are more likely to shopping and job hunting in the morning, at 20% and 22% respectively. At
the
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noon, watching TV and gardening were the most popular things for them at nearly 15%.
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, the
highest rated
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 activities for
women
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 in the morning were
housework
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 and shopping. The percentage of
women
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 who do
housework
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 in the morning was astonishing, which is as twice
as
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the percentage of
women
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 who
does
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do
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 shopping, at 49% and 26%.
Likewise
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,
housework
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 and shopping were still the most optional activities for
women
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 at
the
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apply
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noon, at 21% and 17% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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