The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
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The pie chart featured above illustrates the share of transportation
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the table compares the proportion of factors which cause the
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the cars in Edmonton.
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, what stands out from the diagrams is that the majority of citizens prefer to
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the car to commute to work,
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the usage of buses and taxis rank
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among the four vehicles. With regard to the first graph, it is apparent that the usage of cars has the highest share with 45%,
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that of LRT(Light Rail Transit) accounts for a little less than 40%. When it comes to the bus and taxis, they all together are responsible for 20% of the gross
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of transportation. Focusing the shift to the table,
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more than half of residents opt to commute to work by car.
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, the percentage of people who go to shopping and leisure activities by private vehicles is the same with 15%. There is little difference between the share of people who go to business institutions and taking children to school by personal vehicles, as the former accounts for 45%, the latter is lower by a margin of 5%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • public transportation
  • cultural attitudes
  • electric vs. traditional vehicles
  • peak hours
  • environmental implications
  • economic factors
  • socio-economic divide
  • technological advancements
  • public policy
  • environmental awareness
  • urban development
  • air quality
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • government initiatives
  • community actions
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