the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.

the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.
The provided map illustrates two alternative locations for the new grocery store in Garlsdon, a district with 65,000 population.
Overall
, it is evident that the future design is considering two distinct areas. The first option is located in the countryside,
while
the second one opted for the
town
centre
area
with no traffic zone. The first site is located in the countryside in the west-north of the
town
centre, about 12 km to Hindon. It is very accessible either by railway from the centre of the
town
or by the main road which connects the industrial
area
to Hindon which is occupied by 10,000 population . The upcoming supermarket is planned to be located between the railway and the main road for visitors' convenience. The second location is located the in middle of Garlsdon
town
. The store is expected to sit in a specific
area
with no traffic zone, so it cannot be accessible from a main road.
However
, the railway will run across the site so it still has convenient access for the local communities. It is surrounded by an industry
area
,
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and has two housing areas on the north side and southern side of the site.
Therefore
, it will be accessible to everyone.
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