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You are going on a short training course at a college in New Zealand. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I am coming for
six
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a
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month
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six-month
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 course
in
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at
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 the
University
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 of New Zealand in
coming
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the coming
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 fall .
Therefore
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 , I would like to request
for
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apply
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a
seperate
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separate
room
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 in the hostel for a short period. My name is Roopkamal kaur . Currently , I am
studing
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studying
in
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at
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 the
University
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 of British Columbia ,Canada . I am
pursing
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pursuing
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nursing
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a nursing
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 which
include
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includes
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six
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a
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month
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six-month
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 internship
programm
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program
in
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at
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 the
University
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 of New Zealand in
September
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. I
check
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checked
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website
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the website
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 of the
University
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, which
state
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states
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 that
single
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a single
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room
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available
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is available
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 for international students in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 fall. I want to request
for
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apply
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a private
room
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 because my
programm
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programme
require
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requires
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minimum
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a minimum
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7
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of 7
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to 8
hour
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hours
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study
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of study
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in
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apply
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a day which would be possible if
i
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I
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 study alone without any disturbance .
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, It could be easier for me to access the classes if the
room
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 is available within the campus area . I would like to request
for
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apply
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a
room
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 available from
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september
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September
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 1st because my
intership
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internship
 will
be
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apply
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start on
September
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 15. If I move
in
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at
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the
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 beginning of
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september
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September
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then
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 I have a lot of time to look around
campus
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the campus
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 area and access the
ameneties
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amenities
. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal Kaur.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence which guides the reader about what the paragraph will discuss. This improves the logical flow of information.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to create cohesion within paragraphs and coherence between them. Though your letter is well-structured, using more sophisticated connectives can enhance the readability.
task achievement
Include more detailed specifications about the required accommodation, if possible. Details such as preferred room size, any necessary facilities due to your study requirements, or dietary considerations if meals are included can align your response more closely with the task requirements.
task achievement
Review your letter for any grammatical errors or typos, paying specific attention to subject-verb agreement, correct usage of articles, and punctuation. This will make your message clearer and more professional.
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