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Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Others say countries should have their own law. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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People
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 have various opinions on
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 of
legal
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the legal
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system
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.
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 some
people
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 argue that it is more beneficial for
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 single
law
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systems
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, I strongly believe that specific legislation should be put into effect in different countries. On the
one
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 hand, there is to some extent positive effect on a single
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system
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. It makes easier for communication and cooperation in business.
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, it’s more convenient to contact
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each other, because uniform commercial legal standards are conducive to the
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resolution
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 of economic disputes.
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, it can lead to a decrease in crime rates.
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, criminals would not
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take
advantages
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 of legitimate loopholes in different countries to evade justice. The single jurisprudence
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plays
 a crucial role in prosecuting criminals and convicting them in international court. Our goal is
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 them into prison, ensuring the effectiveness of international order.
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, under different circumstances, only
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law
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system
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 may not always be available, it is more significant to exert their own judicial control.
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, it facilitates
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 the development of the nations.
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, the Chinese government carries out the policy suited to national conditions ,the socialist
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 of
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 with
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 characteristics, which improves the public’s standards of living and ensures the
people
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’s safety legally.
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, the economic development in different regions leads to different requirements and sources for
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 in entertainment, transportation infrastructure and social welfare. It represents that policymakers have a responsibility to meet different demands through taking legal actions.
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, it
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 strengthens the stability of different societies, There is
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 bias towards any
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 social group, because the legal basis corresponds to the circumstances of different conditions and
people
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 all over the world
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equal before the
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that it is better to implement different
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’s
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according to
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 their own conditions.
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Task Achievement
To enhance Task Achievement, ensure your response completely addresses all parts of the prompt. Include more in-depth analysis and a broader range of examples to support your viewpoints. Aim to develop a more nuanced discussion of both sides of the argument before presenting your opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, improve the logical structure of your essay by ensuring smooth transitions between paragraphs and clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph. Use a variety of cohesive devices appropriately to link ideas within and across paragraphs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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