The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar diagram illustrates the number of attendants for four courses at an education place in 2009,
while
the pie chart exhibits the percentage of participants based on their ages.
Overall
, it can be seen that
women
were dominated to present in all evening subjects, except for the sculpture. It was
also
clear that people in their 50s or over attended the courses,
instead
of the other groups.
To begin
with, language was the most visited by
women
which accounted for 40%,
whereas
painting was mostly participated by a quarter number of
men
.
However
,
women
attended more painting and drama programs than
men
, with a third and a fifth respectively.
In addition
,
women
were less likely to come for the sculpture course, it was half of than
men
who were 10% to participate in that course, and the same number for
men
in the drama study.
Furthermore
, it was only 5% of the youngsters aged under 20 participated at the centre,
while
more than a third portion of the oldsters aged 50 or over joined the courses.
Besides
, around a quarter of 40s people came to the classes.
On the other hand
, there were just 11% and 16% of young citizens around 20s and 30s respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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