The graph below shows the consumption of three jam types in an Asian country from 1981-2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of three jam types in an Asian country from 1981-2007.
Since
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1981 to 2007, the line graph illustrates the consumption of three varieties of jams in an Asian country:
magarine
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margarine
, low-fat and reduced spreads, and butter. In general,
magarine
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margarine
is the most consumed
jams
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jam
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at the outset, followed by butter. As time progressed, the consumption of margarine and butter decreased to below 65
grams
each.
In contrast
, low-fat and reduced spreads witnessed a surge in consumption to around 70
grams
in 2007, emerging as the most widely consumed option among the three. Specifically, after a modest increase from 140
grams
to a climax of nearly 160
grams
in 1996, followed by a steady decline to approximately 50
grams
,
magarine
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margarine
experiences a precipitous decline. Notably, low-fat and reduced spreads were not documented prior to 1996.
In contrast
, it experienced a meteoric rise from 10
grams
to an all-time high of 80
grams
in 2001, after which it declined marginally to 70
grams
in 2007.
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  • consumption
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • pattern
  • popularity
  • significant
  • steady increase/decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • outstrip
  • surpass
  • dip
  • sales
  • culinary preferences
  • market share
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