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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison were relevant

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The blueprint presented
demonstrate
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 the site of an airport which will be improved in next year.
Overall
, it will
expend
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expand
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 considerably in future and many new parts will be added as well.
In
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At
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the
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apply
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first glance departure and arrivals will
be remained
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remain
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 as before except
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for some
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some
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a
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 few differences
such
 as moving the café and check-in point in
departure
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the departure
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 part and considering a new bag drop for
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 part.
Furthermore
,
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 area will be developed by a café, ATM, and car hire office.
In addition
,
it
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there
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 will be a new sky train
instead
 of
walkway
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a walkway
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 in order to transfer the passengers to the airplane and a new shop will be built after security and passport control place.
Also
,
exit
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the exit
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 part will
has
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 a new shape with two corridors for leaving the airport.
Although
,
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 a noticeable change will
be occurred
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occur
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for
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in
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 the structure of the airport, the security passport section and the passport control customers
wont
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won't
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 experience any change.
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Task Achievement
For Task Response, ensure that your response covers all key aspects of the task. Your essay provides a general overview, but try to delve deeper into specific changes by comparing the current and future plans with more detail and clarity. Providing more specific examples, such as mentioning significant new additions or removals, would enhance this aspect.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve Coherence and Cohesion, focus on organizing your essay more logically. A clear introduction, detailed body paragraphs focusing on specific changes, and a concluding sentence summarizing the major changes would benefit your essay. Using a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively would also help in making your essay more coherent and easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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