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the picture illustrates instant noodles making process steps. describe it is with 150 word

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The steps it takes to produce instant noodles out of flour are shown in
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8 main steps. The first ingredient for the production
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 is flour, which
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 stored in silos. For
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, two more ingredients are needed to proceed. Those ingredients are water and oil that are used to have a mixture of water and oil plus the flour from
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Mixture
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 that we made
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, gets
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 to some rollers to make dough sheets of them and soon will be reshaped into dough strips. The dough strips in
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 will transform into noodle discs which later will be cooked using oil and dried for
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 is to put the cooked and dried noodles in cups with spices and vegetables for seasoning.
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 the cups of instant noodles will be
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 and sealed. In
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 we figured
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 happens during these 8 steps in order to produce a cup of instant
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Introduction Enhancement
1. Begin by providing a clearer introduction to your essay. Clearly state the overall process before diving into the details. A sentence like 'This process, essential for producing instant noodles, can be divided into eight main steps, beginning with flour and ending with the labeling and sealing of the cups.' would set a solid foundation.
Coherence Enhancement
2. Work on connecting your ideas more effectively. Using transitional phrases such as 'Following this,' 'Subsequently,' or 'Finally' can help guide the reader through the process steps more naturally.
Conclusion Addition
3. Incorporate a conclusion that summarizes the process or provides a final insight. A concluding sentence adds completeness to your writing. For example, 'Through these meticulous steps, instant noodles are efficiently prepared for consumption.'
Task Response
4. To improve task response, ensure that your essay directly addresses every aspect of the task. While you have discussed the process steps in detail, including more specific examples or mentioning more about the significance of each step can add depth to your response.
Language Variety
5. Consider varying your sentence structures and using a wider range of vocabulary to convey your points more effectively. This not only improves readability but also demonstrates your command of the language.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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