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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
On the one hand, there are many possible solutions that the authorities can take to reduce the traffic
jam
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 and pollution.
First,
there are more and more sustainable energy sources
such
 as solar power, wind power, and hydropower that can be utilized to run vehicles and
factory
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, and
as a result
, the emission of greenhouse gases or other harmful gases like carbon monoxide and CFC will be reduced.
For example
, there are many countries using solar panels to run public vehicles or to produce electricity for household
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.
This
 not only saves money on the electricity bill
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 but
also
 encourages people to travel around with eco-friendly and cheap vehicles
such
 as
train
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 or
bus
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.
On the other hand
, in the short term, rising
petrol
price
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 can bring some immediate benefits. Because of the increase in the cost, consumers will have to curb the amount of gasoline that they use, resulting in a decline in private vehicle
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. But in the long run,
this
 policy may be impractical. In
this
 era,
petrol
 is still the most valuable fuel
that is
 used in a lot of aspects.
Therefore
, despite the rise in the cost,
petrol
 remains indispensable, which makes people maintain their dependence on
this
 fuel. In Vietnam,
although
 the authorities have applied
this
 policy
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many times, there was no fall in the number of people who used
petrol
.
Due to
 the fact that I have mentioned above, I completely disagree with the opinion that increasing the price of
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petrol
 is the best way of all.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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