The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The pictures featured above explain the way in which
sugar
is produced from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, what stands out from the diagram is that it is a linear process that comprises several main stages
such
as growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporation, separating crystals, drying, and cooling. The procedure commences when
sugar
canes are grown for 12-18 months. After that, ripe canes are harvested with the help of both machines and farmers which is followed by the grinding up of
sugar
canes in a crushing machine in order to make
juice
. After the making of
juice
, it is placed into a limestone filter to purify to remove any residue.
Following
this
step, pure
juice
is
then
poured into a cylindrical silo and heated by fire to evaporate it before the
juice
becomes
syrup
. In the next stage, the
syrup
is
then
placed in a machine with a rapidly rotating container, namely a centrifuge, in order to separate crystals from the
syrup
. Ultimately, the
syrup
is dried and cooled in a special container and the
sugar
is ready for use.
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