The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
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is produced from
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cane.
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, what stands out from the diagram is that it is a linear process that comprises several main stages
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as growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporation, separating crystals, drying, and cooling. The procedure commences when
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canes are grown for 12-18 months. After that, ripe canes are harvested with the help of both machines and farmers which is followed by the grinding up of
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canes in a crushing machine in order to make
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. After the making of
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, it is placed into a limestone filter to purify to remove any residue.
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this
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step, pure
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is
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poured into a cylindrical silo and heated by fire to evaporate it before the
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becomes
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. In the next stage, the
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is
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placed in a machine with a rapidly rotating container, namely a centrifuge, in order to separate crystals from the
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. Ultimately, the
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is dried and cooled in a special container and the
sugar
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is ready for use.
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