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In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. this accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world photography has become common, where you will see everyone capturing their movements of life. Today's era is full of technology from birth age to old age everyone is using smartphones so it's not surprising at all that people hire professional photographs only on their special occasions like weddings, birthday parties, anniversaries, etc. I do not agree with the point the value of professional photographers is reduced because they are the ones who make people's
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 showcasing their professional way of working with proper lighting and editing. Anyone can capture photos with a smartphone but how professional cameras work that can't compete with smartphones. Social media platforms have become common to use and it's giving the opportunities for people to showcase their talents and enhance their skills in photography so, I think it's giving birth to more and more professional photographers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization
  • visual culture
  • composition
  • lighting
  • technical skills
  • proliferation
  • oversaturate
  • niches
  • unique styles
  • replicated
  • high-quality
  • industries
  • underscore
  • showcase
  • collaboration
  • diverse perspectives
  • photographic landscape
  • amateur
  • professional
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