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#Essay1 ☘️ Agree/Disagree ✅ Q: Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#q #country #language
Living in a country where
one
 has to speak a
language
 other than their native tongue could lead to quite disturbing problems, both on a social level and a practical
one
.
Therefore
, I am in complete agreement with the statement. A
language
 barrier often translates into other forms of barriers,
in addition
 to basic communication. To order something online or through the phone,
for example
, a person should have some understanding of the service provider’s
language
,
otherwise
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otherwise,
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 they would probably not be able to place an order. The same problem occurs when
one
 goes on a job interview, especially
one
that is
 not in person. Without a clear understanding of the employer’s
language
, the candidate is unlikely to make the best first impression and obtain the job.
While
 less severe in
everyday
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, especially face-to-face, interactions, the problem still remains unresolved as missing even the most minute detail of an utterance might lead to misunderstanding and subsequent complications, most notably in understanding culture-bound norms, rituals, or propositions. What is more, a person with little understanding of a
language
 may never find friends, at least lasting ones, or a lover as both cases would require in-depth discussions and arguments on a range of subjects to be held. It is true that there are non-verbal factors involved in any interaction,
such
 as facial expressions and hand gestures, but they never even come close to clear articulation of
language
 in terms of communicating the meaning the speaker has in mind.
This
 very important missing factor tends to result in the breakdown of communication which in turn impedes the formation of a relationship. In conclusion, I believe a
language
 barrier is nothing we can dismiss lightly, especially when living in a country where the official
language
 is
one
 we do not know. [297 words]
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Ensure that the introduction clearly states your position on the question. While you did agree with the statement, making your thesis statement stronger would provide a clearer guide for the reader.
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Develop your ideas further with more specific examples. While you mentioned job interviews and making friends, adding real-life scenarios or more detailed examples could strengthen your argument.
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