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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the spending on research into renewable sources of energy fell into four distinctive
countries
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 from 1975 to 2000.
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, all four
countries
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,
such
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 as Switzerland, Denmark, Spain and the UK, spent a significant amount of money on research into renewable sources of energy.
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; compared to other
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, in the
last
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 decades, from the graph, we can clearly see that
researches
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 into renewable energy sources
of
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 Denmark and Switzerland has skyrocketed. Taking a closer look at 1975’s
its
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 crystal clear that, all
countries
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 began at zero dollars. After
that
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 all
countries
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 increased by 1 dollar in 1980.
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; unfortunately, UK and Spain dropped in 1985.
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, they
were fluctuated
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 between 1990 and 2000; they couldn’t even make more than 1 dollar. As for, Denmark and Spain they were both increased all over the years. They started with 0 dollars, but they
were
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ended with approximately 3 and 5 dollars respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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