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EVERY SCHOOL SYSTEM IN THE WORLD INCLUDES REGULAR TEST AND EXAM, AND MANY THINK THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR STUDENT TO TAKE LOTS OF EXAMS. WHTS YOUR OPENING?

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education
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system
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. In my
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schools
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university
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universities
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. learner with
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 wants to get the result of one year
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 score.
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study
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studding
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result
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 or pass
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 very well, so,
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intellect.
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, I’m not good, always get bad
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 and they start comparing themselves with other
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life
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, respect for other
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 with them. In conclusion, in academic
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 chose the best way and
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 themselves.

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