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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.

The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.
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The line graph below illustrates the changes
Dubai's
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gold
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sales
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 during 2002.
It is clear that
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 the
figures
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 fluctuated during the year before they levelled off in October. The highest figure was in March
while
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 the lowest
gold
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sales
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 were in July and September. At the beginning of the year, the
figures
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 stood at 200
dirhams
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 in January and it slightly increased in February and reached roughly 225
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. By
following
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this
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, the
gold
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sales
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 rose dramatically and reached 350 in March. After that, there was a significant drop during four months from March to July and
figures
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 reached over 100
dirhams
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.
However
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, in August the
gold
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sales
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 grew considerably approximately 200
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 dropped remarkably in September and reached again over 100. In October the
figures
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 increased slightly and reached about 175
dirhams
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 after that, the
gold
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sales
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leveled
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 off in the
last
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 two months and remained unchanged at roughly 200
dirhams
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gold, sales, figures, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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