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The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.
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The table illustrates detailed data about the
rail way
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railway
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 how many
people
 used and how many
cargo
carrier
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carriers
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 in 2007.
Cargo
 units are measured in billions of
tons
.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of
people
 using
rail
 transport and passenger
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per head of population
consist of
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is
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 noticeably higher in Japan than
others
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in others
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.
Moreover
, it is
also
 noteworthy that
cargo
was
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carried to the UK, Japan and Italy were around
same
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the same
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. In detail, it is evident that the
amounto
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amount
 of
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the user
a user
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user
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users
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 was 5.9,
however
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however,
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 the
kilometers
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kilometres
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was
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were
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 770
for
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apply
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per head of population and
finally
,
cargo
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the cargo
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 was carried 22.2
tonna
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tonnes
 by railway in the UK. The number of
user
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users
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 for the USA recorded 0.3 and
then
kilometers
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the kilometers
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 was 80.
Furthermore
, 2820 billion
tons
goods
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of goods
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 were brought by
rail
 transport.
In particular
, it is
avobementioned
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aforementioned
 that the number of
people
 using
rail
 transport except metro gave 27.
Following
this
passagers
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passenger
kilometers
 were
1980
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in 1980
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 and 23.01 billion
tons
cargo
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of cargo
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 were carried.
Last
 but not least, Italy represented 5.5 in the rate of
people
 using
railway
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the railway
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.
Besides
that
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that,
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 780
kilometers
 were
went
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gone
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.
Notibly
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Notably
, brought of
cargo
 was 21.9 billion
tons
 in Italy.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rail, people, cargo, tons, kilometers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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