Nowadays the trend of eating ready made food is increasing. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

In
this
hectic world, eating habits face challenges and become a concern. Most
of
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people
prefere
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prefer
to have fast and ready
meals
, so
This
trend
have
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has
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been
growth
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. I think
although
,
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ready and fast cooked
meals
might be time-saving, it would be harmful for body and
people
's health.
To begin
with,
meals
, preparing
easy
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and fast, can be time-consuming for busy
residential
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. Needless to say, we live in a techno era and
people
want to do
every thing
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everything
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faster
the
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past. Clearly, ready production might be a
choise
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choice
for some
people
.
For example
, employers or students, who
does
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not have enough time to cook and make
meals
might use
this
option.
Consequently
,
this
way is quicker and more accessible than cooking
meals
in
oven
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.
On the other hand
, the quality of ready food generally, is not appropriate in order to consume.
Moreover
,
home cooked
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meals
with
high-quality
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are not
be
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able to
camprison
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compete
with fast foods and ready foods.
Thus
, some of
this
ready production would be harmful
for
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to
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body
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the body
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and may increase
blood-pressure
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blood pressure
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.
As a result
, many
of
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disease
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like cancer would
be
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possibly increase in old
ages
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.
Furthermore
, eating is not just an activity in
due to
stay alive.
While
,
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many individuals consider eating as a therapy and hobby, ready
meals
can be a disaster. So, it may decline
comunication
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communication
and enjoy during
a
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lunch or dinner time. In conclusion, ready foods are increased
between
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consumers,
whereas
this
would be faster and
easy
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to prepare. But I think
this
tendacy
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tendency
might have
long
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effects on public health and decrease
pleasure
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the pleasure
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of eating.
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