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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table featured above illustrates the change in the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after it was renovated,
whereas
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 the pie charts compare the proportion of attitudes towards the quality of travel.
Overall
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, what stands out from the diagrams is that after the refurbishment the museum witnessed a huge influx of tourists compared with the past.
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, the occasion of dissatisfaction saw a decline among travellers. With regard to the first graph,
it is clear that
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 before the museum was remodelled, there were a mere 74.000
people
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,
however
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, after the renovation it hit a peak of 92.000 tourists. Shifting the focus to the second one, it is apparent that the share of
people
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 who were very satisfied with the modification accounted for 15% of the total,
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 that after the refreshment was a little more than a third.
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, the percentage of visitors who were satisfied with the changes rose from 30% to 40%.
In contrast
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, that of travellers who were dissatisfied decreased significantly from 40% to 15%.
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, the proportion of
people
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 who were very dissatisfied with the refurbishment was twice as little as that of before it, and 5% of
people
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 opted to not participate in a survey.
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