The map below shows the development of a park named Grange Park between 1995 and present.

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Arnold Avenue in 1920 and its current look. The place has undergone dramatic changes. Over the period, old rose gardens have been gathered in the middle. With the addition of a cafe and a place for children, the place now has more social places for its visitors and a new amphitheatre and a new water structure have been built.

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seats surrounding it. To the left side of the rose area, a fountain has been built. Just to the right of the entrance a new cafe and a playing ground for young ones have been placed.

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the old stage has been converted into an amphi for music performances.

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