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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The histogram
give
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the
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apply
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information about how many
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pineapple
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pineapples
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 were exported all over the world by the top three producing countries in 2009 and 2019.
Country
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 B exported
near
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 4.5
million
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 metric
tonnes
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 in 2009, which was more than three times as much as
country
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 A(1.3
million
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 metric
tonnes
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). Meantime, the number of
pineapple
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 exports of
country
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 C
was
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merely exceeded 0.
However
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,
pineapple
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 exports by
country
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 A
boosted
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increased
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 sharply to over 10
million
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 metric
tonnes
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while
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country
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 B experienced a decline in
production
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the production
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 of
pineapple
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as
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of
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 1.8
million
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 metric
tonnes
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 in 2019.
Country
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 C went through a slight rise with 0.5
million
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 metric
tonnes
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 in the same year and still was the
country
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 with the least production. The pie charts
illustrates
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 the disruption of cost to the consumer of each
pineapple
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 in 2019.
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Distribution
 and retail accounted
the
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 largest part
as
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at
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 25%
while
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 export costs were the smallest proportion
with
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 4%. The percentage of profit (18%) and taxes (16%) were the second and third largest proportion separately. The rest breakdown of the cost came from international transport, import licences and
producer
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producers
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. In summary,
country
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 A turned
to
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out to
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 be the
top one producing
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top-producing
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country
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 for
pineapple
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 exports in 2019 and the majority of the cost to the consumer of each
pineapple
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 lay in distribution and retail.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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