The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The provided graph depicts the changes
of
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electrical
appliance
use
, namely washing
machine
,
refrigerator
and vacuum cleaner
use
, over the span of 99
years
, from 1920 until 2019. As can be seen in the diagram,
in
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at
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the beginning of
this
time span, in the 1920s, the washing
machine
had the highest
use
per centage
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percentage
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at a 40 per
cent
mark,
while
the
refrigerator
was at its lowest, only around 5 per
cent
. In the next 40
years
however
, the
refrigerator
showed a noticeable rise, rising by 40 per
cent
in the following 20
years
and another 35 per
cent
by the year 1960, after which the increase started to stabilize and reached the absolute of
a
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hundred per
cent
in the 90s. Another household
appliance
that reached
a
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hundred per
cent
,
although
slightly later, is the vacuum cleaner,
while
the washing
machine
remains the only one not reaching 100
percent
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per cent
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.
Whereas
the washing
machine
and the vacuum cleaner have only peaked and stabilized throughout the 99
years
, the washing
machine
experiences slight drops,
such
is
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as
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the one between the
years
1960 and 1980, after which it continued to grow. The given line graph provided us with information about electronic
appliance
usage within households
form
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from
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the year 1920 until 2019. As we have gathered the
refrigerator
showed the biggest soar,
while
the washing
machine
was the only one experiencing decreases in usage.
Nevertheless
, the
overall
trend shows a general climb in
appliance
use
over the
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words appliance, use, machine, refrigerator, years, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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