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Some people believe that money spent on space exploration is not justifiable. There are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been a
while
 since we discussed whether
space
 exploration is right or not. The more technical improvements developed, the more desire there was for exploring other spaces. Sometimes it seems like a decent time, and our success in technical advancement.
Although
 it is important, I completely disagree with it being the only major factor. Opponents contend that we are already on
earth
 with plenty of beautiful atmosphere, and we only have to maintain it naturally. They
have believed
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 that the money spent exploring other planets should go to the poor people
instead
 of finding new solutions.
For example
, it is shown in recent research,
extraordinary
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that extraordinary
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 spending for exploring other planets could generate tons of employment and well-being for people.
However
, advocates that we have to explore other spaces contend that it would be better
to begin
 our new world
instead
 of living on
earth
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Earth
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. They believe that new
space
 will bring us new life without war, poverty, and environmental problems. As discussed above, I absolutely disagree with spending tons of money exploring another
space
 without consideration of the quality of welfare on
earth
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Earth
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. In conclusion, it would be better for humankind to positively find solutions to living together rather than explore another
space
 for the worries of living on
earth
Capitalize word
Earth
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.
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