In some countries, many people suffer from health problems due to eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?
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apply
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eat.
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beautiful
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of this
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havent
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haven't
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a house
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the goverenment
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government is
impos
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impose
this
kind of foods
.Cause of more pupil like fast Fix the agreement mistake
food
foods
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small
tabels
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tables
table
foods
.
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say
foods
are unhealthy for all people
cause of they prepared
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are prepared
childrens
are very ill with fast Correct your spelling
children
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people
think fast food
is most healthy
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healthier
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.Nowadays some people
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dont
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.
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