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The provided maps so the map of stokeford for the year 1930 and 2010.

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The provided maps
depictq
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 the area of
stokeford
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. The data is given for the
year
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 1930 and 2010.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that
,
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 several new accommodations were built. Variation in shopes,
farmland
 and big
house
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houses
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 was observed. Looking at the chart of 1930 the village of
stockford
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Rockford
stock ford
 is located on the east side of
river stock
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River Stock
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. There
where
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were
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 three
farmland
 on the bank of
river
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the river
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 from north to south. On the north of
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the farmland
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farmland
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farmland,
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 there were post
office
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offices
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,
to
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shops and few accommodations. Behind
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the farmland
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farmland
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farmland,
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 there was a vertical
road
 a bridge on the North side of the village
is joint
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joined
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 with
this
road
. On the left of the
road
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 there was a garden and a big house. On the left of
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garden
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garden,
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 there was a primary school and some accommodation
as well as
 three farmlands. Analysing the map of your 2010
further
, all the formulas are converted to houses near the river bank. Gardens are eliminated and two accommodations are constructed on
the
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either side of
road
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the road
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 the large house of 1930 was changed to
retirement
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a retirement
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 home.
Post
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 office and bridge remained on
changed
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. Some new
building
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buildings
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 were constructed for primary school.
For New
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A new
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 housing society where constructed between
bridge
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a bridge
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 and
primary
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the primary
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 school connected to
road
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the road
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task achievement
Ensure a clear and precise introduction, summarizing the main changes without going into detail. This sets the stage for a more detailed comparative analysis.
task achievement
In terms of task achievement, try to include a conclusion that synthesizes the information provided in the essay, reinforcing the main changes identified.
coherence cohesion
Organize paragraphs logically: start each paragraph with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea, followed by supporting details. Group related information together for clarity.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to more clearly connect ideas within and between sentences. This helps guide the reader through your analysis.
coherence cohesion
Pay more attention to spelling and grammar to avoid misunderstandings. Correct use of terminology related to the map features can also enhance the clarity of your essay.

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