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The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000

The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000
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The bar chart shows
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about
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of
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 the
number
 of population of adults in
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the percent
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percent
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per cent
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 who
experienced
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were
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 overweight in
Japan
, Finland,
Australia
 and
USA
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the USA
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 from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that
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the USA
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USA
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the USA
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 predominated throughout the periods. All of the countries except
Japan
 experienced a significant increase from 1980 to 2000,
while
japan
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Japan
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 remained unchanged
number
at
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in
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 the first ten years. Looking in more detail,
USA
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the USA
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 stood at 15%
in
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of
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adults
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adult
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 residents
number
.
Then
, there was a sharp growth in
sum
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the sum
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 of
overweight
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the overweight
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 mature population in 1990.
Next,
it dramatically rose and reached the highest position
at the end
 of
frame
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the frame
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 time. In the
mean
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meantime
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time
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time,
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Japan
 was the lowest country in overweight residents for adults.
Japan
 began at under 5% population and remained
to
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unchanged
number
 until 1990.
However
, there was a slight
rose
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 between 1990
to
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and
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 2000. Meanwhile, Finland and
Australia
 had
a nearly similar trends
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a nearly similar trend
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. In
Finlad
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Finland
, the
number
 of grown-up people who passed obesity started
in
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at
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 just over 5%.
Then
, it slightly grew in 1990 and underwent a gradual jump.
The
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 similar condition was experienced by
Australia
. At
beginning
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the beginning
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 of
period
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the period
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,
Australia
 set to just over 5%
as
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like
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 Finland
and
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apply
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followed by a gradual jump.
Then
,
at the end
 of
frame
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the frame
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 time, there was a sharp increase
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, japan, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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