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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and development soft skill in more important Discus both views and give your opinion’

#university #education #job #hand #people #development #skill #discus #opinion’
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 some people assert that completing
university
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education
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 is the optimal way to get a job placement, others opine that getting experience and developing soft
skills
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 are more important.
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, what I believe is that developing soft
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 is more important than completing
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education
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. To commence with, there are multiple reasons why soft
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 are more critical than a
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education
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, out of which the most significant is soft
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 more effectively which could not be taught by completing the
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education
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. For
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay introduces the topic effectively but lacks a clear structure that makes it easy to follow your argument. To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' to link your ideas smoothly.
Task Achievement
For task achievement, your essay does not fully address both views as required by the prompt. Make sure to discuss both the importance of university education and gaining experience/developing soft skills equally before giving your opinion. Use specific examples to support each view.
General
The essay leaves the argument incomplete. It's crucial to finish your thoughts and provide a concluding paragraph that summarizes your views and states your opinion clearly. This helps in fulfilling the task requirements.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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