The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.

The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.
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The provided three
pie
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charts compare the differences in
holiday takers
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holiday-takers
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accommodation
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choices over the years of 1965, 1985 and 2000. The provided
accommodation
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options are staying with
friends
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or relatives, booking a hotel, camping or staying in caravans.
Initially
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, we can see that the dominant choice in 1965 was staying with
friends
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or relatives, taking up more than
one half
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one-half
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of the
pie
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chart at 55 per
cent
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. The other three options showed little difference in percentage, given that all three were taking up just about 15 per
cent
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of the
pie
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chart.
However
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, the situation changed in 1985,
where
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booking hotels roughly doubled in popularity and made up 37 per
cent
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of the
accommodation
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preference. Camping experienced a slight rise in percentage,
while
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caravans mildly dropped to 10 per
cent
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. A significant drop can be seen in the possibility of staying with
friends
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,
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the fact that only 35 per
cent
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of people made
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an
accommodation
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choice in 1985.
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, in 2005, caravans made a comeback, reaching a record fraction and taking up
one fifth
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one-fifth
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of the whole
pie
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chart,
while
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staying with
friends
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reached an
all time
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all-time
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low of 30 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, accommodation, friends, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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