You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. • describe what you enjoyed about the course • say how much cooking you’ve done since the course • suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer
Dear Mr. Smith,
I hope
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I look forward to participating in your upcoming programme.
Warm regards,
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Task Response
To improve task response, ensure that every aspect of the prompt is addressed thoroughly. In your letter, while you've covered all points, further elaboration on how much cooking you've done since the course, with more specific examples, could strengthen your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on connecting your ideas more smoothly. Consider using linking phrases such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition to this', or 'Consequently'. This will help your paragraphs flow better from one idea to the next, enhancing the overall cohesion of your letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
In terms of logical structure, your letter is well-organized, but it could be improved by more clearly delineating paragraphs, potentially by adding a line space between them. This visual separation can make your letter easier to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion
For greeting and closing, you've used appropriate formal language, which is good. To further refine your style, consider using 'Dear Course Director' or the specific name if known, and ensure the closing is equally formal and well-matched to the greeting's tone.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.