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The charts below show the changes in ownership ofelectrical appliances andamount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership ofelectrical appliances andamount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs
indicates
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indicate
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 the variations in the
percenteage
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percentage
 of the possessing
of
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apply
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electrical appliances and the number of
hours
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spending
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spent
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 on housework in households for a week in a country from 1920 to 2019. The percentage of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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boosts
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has
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 evidently from 2% or so to the peak of 100% in 1980 and
remains
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remained
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in
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at
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this
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 figure for nearly 4 decades. There is a similar trend can be seen in the figure for vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, rising from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000 with a stable trend during the next 19 years. As for the figure for washing
machine
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machines
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, it
increases
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increased
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 fluctuately to about 73% in 2019.
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, the amount of time people
spending in
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spend
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 doing housework including washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning per week
decreases
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decreased
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 nearly five times markedly from 50
hours
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 to 11
hours
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 between the year from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the changes in ownership of household facilities and the number of
hours
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spending
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spent
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 on housework using a household per week show a
defferent
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different
 trend with each other.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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