The car is possibly the most convenient and popular way of getting from A to B. However, due to its impact on the environment and the risk it poses to pedestrians and motorists, governments should take urgent steps to reduce our dependency on this mode of transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

While
some people continue to select cars as their mode of transportation, it can bring several risks to society, which makes the government
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methods for reducing its usage, and I completely agree with
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conditions.
Furthermore
,
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essay will discuss the reasons for my given statement.
To begin
with, the declining proportion of
car
drivers
can make the street more secure since
car
transport has been a major contributor to street accidents. It is acceptable because nowadays enormous
car
manufacturers are installing technologies that can heighten the driver’s convenience but fail to make them do mindful driving.
As a result
, they are not aware of their surroundings
while
driving, which eventually involves them in road accidents.
For example
, the automatic
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system in Tesla may be helpful for
drivers
who want to multitask during their journey.
However
, recent statistics have proven that almost 90% of
car
accidents in the United States were
also
caused by
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drivers
who use that system.
This
means that
although
streetcars already
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comfortable way to drive, it does not guarantee to hinder the
drivers
from unwanted events.
Furthermore
, decreasing the number of gasoline-based vehicles can result in a healthier environment.
For instance
, in Jakarta, the local decree that has been issued by the Jakarta governor, Anies Baswedan, regarding the prohibition of taking private vehicles to transport in the town for about five days has resulted in
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good air quality and a remarkable decrease in the percentage of people who suffer from respiratory diseases. It is found to be effective since the amount of hazardous gases that can cause air pollution,
such
as nitrogen and carbon dioxide that have been emitted into the sky from cars has reduced significantly.
To conclude
, I completely agree with the government’s plan to reduce the number of
car
drivers
, because it can make the
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safer and the environment healthier.
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