Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events.Do you you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Whether
people
around the world
use
social
media
everytimes
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every time
to keep in
touch
with other
people
and get
news
events
is a recurring argument.
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writer argues the
positives
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effect of
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social
media
to keep in
touch
and get
news
events
overshadow
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the negative effect of
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. The most advantageous factor of
use
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using
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social
media
is that it can help develop the
relationship
and create more
it
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apply
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in the future.
In other words
,
people
can develop their
our
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relationship
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relationships
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with others for more contact or
message
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with them.
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prior knowledge,
almost
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most
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people
around the world
use
social
media
to keep in
touch
and contact with them,
people
can easily
to
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create
relationship
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relationships
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.
Thus
,using social
media
is a good way to improve and create more
relationship
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relationships
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.
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news
events
must
also
be considered,it must be recognized that
people
in the past always read
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to get information about the
events
and in the modern ages
people
can do it at home by just
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the internet,
this
way
people
can upload the information very quickly and easily.
There by
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,using social
media
to get
news
events
are
the
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an
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easy way to get the information and
people
can do it.
However
,
by
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usig
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using
too much social
media
can lead to
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,
people
afraid
about
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that
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they miss
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interesting news
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news
and they just keep
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the
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social
media
for an hour to watch it.
Consequently
,
usinf
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using
social
media
for available time,
use
it in right it can help you a lot in
our
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life. Taking all points into account,
be
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addicted
on
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to
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social
media
is
overshadow
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by using
in
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wrong
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ways,if we
use
it wrong ways it can harm
to
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our health.
Hence
using social
media
to keep in
touch
and get
news
events
can
useful
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to
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in
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our
life
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but we need aware
the
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timetable when we
use
it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • facilitate
  • geographically separated
  • fostering
  • connectivity
  • instant communication
  • real-time information
  • misinformation
  • rigorous checks and balances
  • fake news
  • addictive nature
  • detract
  • face-to-face interactions
  • mental health
  • awareness of limitations
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