The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000

The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000
A glance at the chart provided reveals the upward trends in the figures of the adult population
were
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overweight over a
20 year
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period, from 1980 to 2000 in four selected countries, namely:
Japan
,
Finland
,
Australia
and the
USA
.
Overall
, it is immediately apparent that all four countries witnessed similar upward trends over the given period though the
USA
increased at a faster pace. Another outstanding feature is that the
USA
had the highest percentage of overweight adults. As regards the
obese
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levels in the
USA
, it can be clearly seen that in 1980, the proportion started at 15%. The figures for
Finland
and
Australia
were lower, at about 6% and 8% respectively.
Japan
had the lowest figure at 1%. In 1990, the percentage of overweight adults in the
USA
rose to around 25% of the population,
while
the figures for
Finland
and
Australia
reached just under 10% and the figure for
Japan
remained steady. By 2000, the proportion of weighty adolescents was highest still in the
USA
and lowest in
Japan
, at about 30% and 3%
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turn. In comparison with the figure for
Australia
, which experienced a dramatic rise to over 20%,
Finland
had just over 10% of overweight adults.
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