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Many people believe that it’s better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?​

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Nowadays, there is an ongoing issue regarding as advantages of studying in a
group
. Some
people
 assert that it is more efficient to study individually since they can concentrate on studying more and they would not lose their pace.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that learning something in a
group
 is more helpful
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 and tackle to solve problems that they can not deal with. I agree that studying as a
group
 is better than studying individually. I will introduce some reasons why I think that.
Firstly
, it is important to be encouraged when they learn something. It is easy to be exhausted in long-term studying if they do not have studying partners. The
group
 members try to do activities to achieve the same goal and encourage each other. It is not only helpful to improve their socializing skills but
also
 creativity as there are
people
 who have
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same interest. Aside from that, they can share useful
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 about related
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competitions
 or how to study.
Furthermore
, they can ask the
group
 members about the problems they do not know the answer. Sometimes, it is hard to search for information by themselves.
While
 asking and replying to each other, they can conclude the answer more quickly than finding it alone.
In addition
, they can check whether they really understand that concept.
Thus
, it would help them keep memorizing that concept in their mind longer. Studies from the University of Seoul show studying method which is based on discussion form is more effective to memorize and develop logical thinking skills. In conclusion, learning in a
group
 has positive effects by improving
people
's creativity and efficiency in performing tasks. For these reasons, I support the idea that learning something in a
group
 is more beneficial.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay successfully presents a clear, detailed argument in support of the group learning approach. To enhance your score further, consider adding more varied connective words and transitions for smoother flow between ideas.
Task Achievement
For task achievement, you've done well in providing relevant examples and thorough explanations. To improve, try to directly address potential counterarguments to your position, which can enrich your analysis and show a deeper understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative problem-solving
  • exchange of ideas
  • peer support
  • social interaction
  • fosters
  • enrich
  • perspective
  • motivate
  • isolation
  • feedback
  • misconceptions
  • self-paced
  • retention
  • self-discipline
  • lifelong learning
  • customization
  • engagement
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