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Many parents believe that children should read strict educational books and not any other entertainment books as it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree.

#parents #children #books #entertainment #time
Books
 are an important source of knowledge for people, which have many impacts on
children
's learning way.
While
 many parents
suggests
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,
children
 should read only from educational
books
. I strongly disagree with
this
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 because
in
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every kind of
books
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book
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 have hidden knowledge. .
To begin
 with, reading various types of
books
that
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can improve and combine knowledge. Nowadays
books
pay
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 a crucial role for many people, who really want to explore their perspective.
For example
, When
children
 want to know about their future occupation,they can find the right way in inspirational
book
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books
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.
Moreover
,
the
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comics
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comic books
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book
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encourage
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children
 to read more, which make more benefits
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to
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their reading
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skills
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skill
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 and creativity. Because the
comics
 would
illustrates
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 the hard information
in
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easily.
Additionally
, entertainment and
comics
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books
 influence
to
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children
 in many
way
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ways
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. First of all, explode their intellect and give them new information.
For instance
,
the
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comics
adds
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sciencetific
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scientific
 information to
comics
, which can inspire and enhance
to
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children
.
Secondly
, Relaxing and reduce stress from
study
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 at school because it contain a lot of funny content.
Furthermore
,
comics
 can change
children
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children's
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reading habits and help them interest in education
books
.
For example
, a research project from
USA
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depict
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that
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the trend of
children
 reading
book
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books
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. They found that
children
, who
reading
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comics
 rather than have better
in
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reading capacity and reading fluency, which is
reason
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the reason
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 for their intellectual growth.
To conclude
, parents should integrate various types of
book
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 for their
children
. which
is pay
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 a crucial role
to
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the intelligent
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intelligent
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 and creativity of
children
. I disagree that
children
 should only read strict
books
 related to their academics.
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