The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates two different climate areas including tropical
mountains
and temperate
mountains
.
Overall
, in terms of the altitudes of lines including snow
line
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lines
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,
limit
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the limit
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for spruce and
limit
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the limit
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for broad-leaf trees are
tottally
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totally
different in these two
mountains
.
Firstly
, The highest altitude of
tropical
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a tropical
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mountain
is 5500
meters
. which is 2000
meters
higher than
Temperate
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the Temperate
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Mountains
. The snow line starts from 4300
meters
in Tropical
mountaun
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mountain
mountains
,
conversely
which is presented
2800
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meters
in Temperate
Mountain
.
Moreover
,
Forest
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the Forest
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zone
in tropical
mountain
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mountains
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starts from 3100
meters
to reach 4000
meters
, which is almost three times bigger than
forest
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the forest
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zone
in
temperate
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the temperate
a temperate
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mountain
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mountains
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.
Secondly
, There are
not
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no
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warm
zone
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zones
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and temperate zones in Temperate
mountain
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Mountain
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,
however
, its cool
zone
is consisted
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consists
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one
half
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one-half
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of
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the heights
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heights
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height
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, which reaches around 1400
meters
.
Conversely
, in tropical
mountain
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mountains
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, temperature and warm zones, which are used for coffee, cocoa plantation and tropical crops, are presented nearly
one third
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one-third
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of the
mountain
's allocation and height with 0 to 1700
meters
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "conversely".
Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, mountain, meters, zone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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