The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates two different climate areas including tropical
mountains
and temperate mountains
.
Overall
, in terms of the altitudes of lines including snow line
, Fix the agreement mistake
lines
limit
for spruce and Correct article usage
the limit
limit
for broad-leaf trees are Correct article usage
the limit
tottally
different in these two Correct your spelling
totally
mountains
.
Firstly
, The highest altitude of tropical
Correct article usage
a tropical
mountain
is 5500 meters
. which is 2000 meters
higher than Temperate
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the Temperate
Mountains
. The snow line starts from 4300 meters
in Tropical mountaun
, Correct your spelling
mountain
mountains
conversely
which is presented 2800
Change preposition
at 2800
meters
in Temperate Mountain
. Moreover
, Forest
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the Forest
zone
in tropical mountain
starts from 3100 Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
meters
to reach 4000 meters
, which is almost three times bigger than forest
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the forest
zone
in temperate
Add an article
the temperate
a temperate
mountain
.
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mountains
Secondly
, There are not
warm Correct your spelling
no
zone
and temperate zones in Temperate Fix the agreement mistake
zones
mountain
, Capitalize word
Mountain
however
, its cool zone
is consisted
one Change to the active voice
consists
has consisted
half
of Correct your spelling
one-half
Correct article usage
the heights
heights
, which reaches around 1400 Fix the agreement mistake
height
meters
. Conversely
, in tropical mountain
, temperature and warm zones, which are used for coffee, cocoa plantation and tropical crops, are presented nearly Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
one third
of the Add a hyphen
one-third
mountain
's allocation and height with 0 to 1700 meters
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "conversely".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, mountain, meters, zone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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