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The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates two different climate areas including tropical
mountains
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 and temperate
mountains
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.
Overall
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, in terms of the altitudes of lines including snow
line
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lines
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,
limit
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the limit
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 for spruce and
limit
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the limit
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 for broad-leaf trees are
tottally
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totally
 different in these two
mountains
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Firstly
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, The highest altitude of
tropical
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a tropical
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mountain
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 is 5500
meters
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. which is 2000
meters
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 higher than
Temperate
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the Temperate
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Mountains
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. The snow line starts from 4300
meters
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 in Tropical
mountaun
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mountain
mountains
,
conversely
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 which is presented
2800
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at 2800
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meters
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 in Temperate
Mountain
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.
Moreover
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,
Forest
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the Forest
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zone
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 in tropical
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mountain
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mountains
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 starts from 3100
meters
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 to reach 4000
meters
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, which is almost three times bigger than
forest
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the forest
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zone
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 in
temperate
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the temperate
a temperate
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mountain
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mountains
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.
Secondly
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, There are
not
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no
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 warm
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zone
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zones
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 and temperate zones in Temperate
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mountain
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Mountain
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,
however
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, its cool
zone
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is consisted
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consists
has consisted
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 one
half
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one-half
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 of
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the heights
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heights
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height
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, which reaches around 1400
meters
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.
Conversely
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, in tropical
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mountain
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mountains
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, temperature and warm zones, which are used for coffee, cocoa plantation and tropical crops, are presented nearly
one third
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one-third
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 of the
mountain
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's allocation and height with 0 to 1700
meters
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "conversely".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, mountain, meters, zone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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