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University education should be free for all students. Agree disagree?

#university #education #students
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In Today’s society, post-school
education
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 is an integral part of our lives, which helps humankind to develop
further
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. Some people believe that
university
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education
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 should be accessible in terms of finance and free. I totally agree with the statement. In
this
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 essay, I will explore various dimensions of the issue, and provide an analysis of the statement to its extent.
Firstly
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, there are some fundamentals and equal rights for societies.
Such
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 as accommodation,
health
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and health
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, and a significant
important
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apply
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one is
education
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, including all stages: primary, high school, and
university
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. In order to
further
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 the development of human beings in all wages, people need to get educated and learn. On the ground that we have to grant
university
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education
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all
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to all
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students
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 who are able to pass the entrance exam not to
who
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those who
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 are willing to pay for it.
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 doctors and engineers are very important roles for society imagine
universities
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 are choosing their candidates based on their wealth not success.
This
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 can lead to a catastrophic situation.
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, if we keep tuition
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fee
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fees
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 for
universities
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,
students
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 may lose their focus on their studies.
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instance
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 they might have to work in a part-time job in order to pay school
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fee
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fees
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 and spend their valuable time
for
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on
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 useless
job
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jobs
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in stead
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instead
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 of
job
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jobs
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 in their laboratory.
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 even some
intelligence
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student
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students
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not
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do not
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 attempt to
take
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get
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university
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a university
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education
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 just to avoid
of
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apply
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school
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fee
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fees
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. On the other, some believe that if we keep,
universities
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 free,
students
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 may not
hard
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be hard
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 working on their majors.
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, to eliminate the additional pressure on
students
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,
universities
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 should be free. In conclusion, whether some people supporting to keep
university
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 tuition
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fee
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fees
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, My possession is,
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universities
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that universities
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 should be free to
students
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. It will be beneficial for
indivuals
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individuals
 and society .
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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