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Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Learning a
language
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 in the early
years
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 of school is said to be beneficial to students whilst other people believe that languages should be introduced later on when students have acquired knowledge of other
subjects
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. I am of the view that a
language
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 should be
one
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 of the first
subject
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 to be taught in the early
years
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 and to be perfected as the
years
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 of learning
progresses
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.
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language
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 can be
one
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 of the most difficult
subjects
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 that a student could come across as it might be foreign to them. If
one
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 does not use that particular
language
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 in their
day to day
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, they will need more time to understand the basics and
then
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 get used to it for them to be fluent
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 the need to start early on.
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also
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 argue that other
subjects
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 like mathematics, history, geography and so many others are usually taught in English in many countries all over the world so there is
need
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to begin
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 with English
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 amongst other languages so that students can immensely understand all those other
subjects
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.
However
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, a
language
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 can be introduced in the later
years
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 of learning.
This
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 is so because there is a need to understand
basics
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the basics
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 of learning which is acquired when
one
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 fully understands other
subjects
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 which are basics like writing and reading. A student will have to learn how to read and write the things they fully understand before being introduced to more complex
subjects
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 as languages. I could argue that
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 the better when it comes to fully grasping the complexity of a
language
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. When the
years
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 of learning
progresses
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one
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 will
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 be able to speak, read and write if only they started to learn early.

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Consider starting with a clearer thesis statement to direct your argument. This will also enhance your introduction and conclusion, making your position and reasoning clearer from the outset.
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Elaborate on your main points by providing more specific examples and evidence. This could involve citing statistics, quoting expert opinions, or using hypothetical scenarios to make your points more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Try to structure your essay with clearer paragraphs, each devoted to a specific point. Use topic sentences to introduce the point of each paragraph, and ensure there is a logical flow from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, use transitional phrases to connect ideas within paragraphs and to link paragraphs to each other. This will make your essay easier to follow and reinforce the relationships between your ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • cultural awareness
  • effective language acquisition
  • early exposure
  • natural pronunciation
  • intonation
  • foundational literacy skills
  • multilingual education
  • intensive study
  • foundational understanding
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