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you and your family are living in a acommodation in English - speaking country. You ae satisfied with the condition of the furniture. Write a letter to landlord.

#acommodation #english #country #ae #condition #furniture #landlord
Dear Ahmad, Hope you doing well. I am
tatent
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patient
talent
 of one of your properties. We were shifted
in
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 the
apartment
 4 Months ago. I want to discuss some issues we have been facing since shifting
the
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 said
apartment
. When we were very happy when rented out
this
apartment
. Because the
overall
 look of the
apartment
 is awesome from the outside and inside.
Although
 the furniture is not new but in good condition. In
fact
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 these issues need your attention, just like the dining table and sofa set needs to be repaired. One more thing I want to add is that airconditioner is a bit noisy which
create
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 irritation
while
 sleeping, there is
also
 a problem with the bathroom tap. I appreciate the way to behave with your tents and hope you will take serious notice of my submissions. I'll be very thankful for your kindness. Yours Faithfully, Kunwar
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logical structure
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. While your structure is generally good, it could be improved by more clearly separating the introduction of your letter, the body where you list the issues, and the conclusion where you express your hope for action.
greeting and closing
Remember to use a polite and formal greeting and closing. In this case, 'Dear Ahmad' is an appropriate greeting but consider using 'Yours sincerely' instead of 'Yours Faithfully,' especially since you know the name of the landlord. Also, make sure to sign off with your full name to make your letter more formal and polite.
single idea per paragraph
Try to organize your letter by dedicating a single paragraph to each issue you're raising. This helps the reader to understand and follow your concerns more easily. Moreover, transitions between paragraphs could be smoother to enhance the flow of your letter.
complete response
Fully addressing the task requires not only listing problems but also suggesting potential solutions or requesting specific actions from your landlord. This makes your letter more constructive and likely to achieve results.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent formal tone throughout the letter. While your tone is mostly appropriate, phrases like 'Hope you doing well' can be made more formal and correct (e.g., 'I hope you are doing well'). Paying attention to small details in phrasing can enhance the professionalism of your letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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