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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #cost #fuel
The line graph provides information about how much various kinds of fish were consumed in a country located in Europe from 1979 to 2004. Generally,
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 majority of people have consumed beef more than other types
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 dropped remarkably since 1989 to less than 200g and it
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 in 2004.
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 was around 60g and it remained almost stable over the period
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mentioned. Chicken as
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meat
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150g in 1979. It doubled significantly in
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 period. After 1989, it increased sharply to more than 250g in 2004.
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This
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50g in 2004.
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task response
Ensure to directly address the given task. Your essay should clearly state your position on whether increasing the cost of fuel is the best way to solve global environmental problems, providing relevant arguments to support your view.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs each presenting a separate viewpoint or argument, and a conclusion summarizing your position.
task response
Provide specific examples or evidence to support your main points. This could include data, studies, or hypothetical scenarios that directly relate to the effectiveness of increasing fuel costs as a solution to environmental issues.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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