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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
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imformation
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information
both
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 coffee and bananas between 1999 and 2004 with Fairtrade- labelled in five
Europeon
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European
 countries
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UK
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the UK
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 , Switzerland ,
Denmark
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Belgium
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Sweden
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and Sweden
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. Coffee
sales
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 in 1999 , Switzerland
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 the highest one
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with
 3
millions
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Denmark
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 with 1.8 . UK and
Belgium
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 are 1.5 and 1
sales
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 . The country that has the lowest
sales
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 is
Sweden
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 with almost 1
million
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 . In 2004 , The previous highest
sales
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icreased
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increased
 to 6 which is Switzerland ,
Denmark
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 and
Belgium
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 both increased a little bit and
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 2 and 1.7 .
Sweden
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finally
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 1
million
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 in 2004 . The country that has the highest increase
is
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in
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UK
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the UK
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 with 1.5
million
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 to 20
million
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sales
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Sales
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 of bananas , comparing 1999 to 2004 . The country that has the highest increase is
Swetzerland
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Switzerland
 with 15
million
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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. The lowest increase is
Belgium
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 with 0.6 to 4 . Two countries dropped
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their
sales
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 of bananas ,
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 those dropped to 1.8 to 1 and 2 to 0.9
million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words denmark, belgium, sweden, sales, million with synonyms.
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