Write a letter to your neighbour requesting him to lend you his laptop. In you letter: - Describe why you need a laptop. - How long you will be requiring the laptop. - Ensure him about the safety of his device and its content.

Dear Mr. Tom, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing to request that you kindly lend me your Core i5 7th Gen Intel
laptop
.
As my
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device just packed up, and I have an assignment deadline tomorrow morning. Twenty-four hours is enough to complete my task, and I assure you of the complete safety of your
laptop
.
Due to
the power outage from my circuit breaker next door, my device's motherboard is fried. Unfortunately, I have a tight timeframe to complete my course lab, which is due by 9:00 AM on April 25th, 2024. I believe I will complete all my assignments and get my
laptop
up and running within a day.
Therefore
, if you can leave your device with me for 24 hours,
this
would enable me to achieve my aim. I understand the importance of keeping laptops safe from coffee spills or viruses from the internet.
Hence
, I would install my antivirus software to combat
this
,
as well as
use a
laptop
stand to raise it a few meters above my reading desk. I look forward to your swift response to my request. Warm regards, Mbuba Ebere.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clarity. Your letter does well in structuring different aspects of your request (reason for borrowing, duration, and security measures) into separate paragraphs, contributing to the overall coherence.
coherence cohesion
While you have a polite tone, starting the letter with a friendly greeting and ending with a courteous closing, consider using more varied sentence structures to improve the flow of your letter.
task achievement
Your letter effectively addresses all parts of the task, clearly explaining why you need the laptop, how long you need it for, and how you will ensure its safety. To enhance task achievement, make sure to directly address the recipient by name in your request for a more personalized touch.
task achievement
Maintain a suitable writing tone throughout your letter, which you have managed well. To enhance this further, consider expressing gratitude for the recipient’s potential cooperation at the end of your letter.
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