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The chart below shows five countries where Australia students studied from 2004 to 2006

The chart below shows five countries where Australia students studied from 2004 to 2006
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The chart describes the changes in
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students
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' destinations to study abroad over a period of three consecutive years. In general, most of these nations attracted more
Australian
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students
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 during the time surveyed with the exception of Japan.
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, the USA had the largest number of learners from
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. In 2004, the number of
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students
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 choosing the USA and New Zealand was almost the same, at about 2500, making a gap of 1000 in comparison with that of the UK. In the next two years,
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 the USA remained
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 upward trend to peak at 2800, both New Zealand and the UK witnessed a slight increase and stabilized at 2600 and 1600, respectively in 2006.
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, Germany and Japan attracted fewer pupils from Australia than their counterparts. Commencing at 300, the figure for Germany reduced slightly before going up to end at 400.
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, Japan shared the same pattern with Germany when attracted around 400
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 in 2004 and 2006, despite a minimal decrease in 2005.

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