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THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012
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The given line graph gives
the
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information about changes in
burglary
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, car theft and robbery in the
center
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 of Newport
city
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 in the period between 2003 and 2012. Units are measured in hundreds and thousands.
Overall
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, there was
dramatically
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 reduction in
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burglary
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the burglary
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 rate.
Additionally
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, the amount of crime
such
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 as robbery from person had fluctuation and showed the lowest points during the given periods.
According to
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 the data, the figure for
burglary
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 remained just below 3500 incidents in 2003,
then
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 it reached its peak at approximately 3800 in the next year .
However
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, in the following four
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years
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years,
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 the amount of
burglary
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 rapidly declined to about 1000.
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, from 2008 to 2012 there was an oscillation.
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,
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 the
number
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 of car thefts in the first two
years
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 maintained almost the same
number
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 of 2800 occurrences, after it gradually declined
the
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to the
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 lowest point
to
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of
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 just 2000 in 2006 and in the remaining
years
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 there was a period of volatility and increased to the almost similar
number
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 as in the beginning.
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, the trend of robbery showed approximately the same
number
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 of just above 500 in the first and the
last
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years
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, where it peaked
to
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at
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 about 1000 in 2005 and went down to the lowest point
at
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of
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 500 in 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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