THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012
The given line graph gives
the
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information about changes in
burglary
, car theft and robbery in the
center
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of Newport
city
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in the period between 2003 and 2012. Units are measured in hundreds and thousands.
Overall
, there was
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reduction in
burglary
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rate.
Additionally
, the amount of crime
such
as robbery from person had fluctuation and showed the lowest points during the given periods.
According to
the data, the figure for
burglary
remained just below 3500 incidents in 2003,
then
it reached its peak at approximately 3800 in the next year .
However
, in the following four
years
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the amount of
burglary
rapidly declined to about 1000.
Finally
, from 2008 to 2012 there was an oscillation.
It is clear that
,
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the
number
of car thefts in the first two
years
maintained almost the same
number
of 2800 occurrences, after it gradually declined
the
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lowest point
to
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just 2000 in 2006 and in the remaining
years
there was a period of volatility and increased to the almost similar
number
as in the beginning.
On the other hand
, the trend of robbery showed approximately the same
number
of just above 500 in the first and the
last
years
, where it peaked
to
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about 1000 in 2005 and went down to the lowest point
at
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500 in 2008.
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