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27.The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to overweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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languages are the source of communication through which people can understand the emotions of the other masses . Some people believe that the
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 brings plenty of benefits .
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, as per the survey who have
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earn more through the business networks which spread globally.
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 development became easy and convenient.
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 they only speak their mother tongue and the sign on the
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 of the international community
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education will never come to know about
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 should be obligatory for all the colleges and schools so , students will not face any complications in order to flourish.

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task response
To enhance the score in task response, it is advisable to develop your arguments further with more specific examples and a deeper analysis. Clarify how the advantages outweigh the disadvantages with precise details to enrich your response.
coherence cohesion
In terms of coherence and cohesion, focus on structuring your essay more logically. Ensure each paragraph flows naturally to the next with clear transitions. Additionally, improving paragraph division by dedicating separate paragraphs to distinct ideas will enhance clarity and understanding.
language
Consistently checking for grammatical errors and ensuring the correct use of vocabulary will greatly improve the quality of your essay. Aim for variety in sentence structures and vocabulary to showcase your language skills.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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