Writing task 1 general training -You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase Write letter to the company that you bought the clothing from.In your email -give details of the purchase Describe the problem -explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear Madam, My name is Parthvi and I am writing
this
letter to express my dissatisfaction with the material of the cloth that I purchased
last
week from the Veerea store online . I would like to request the replacement of the
dress
urgently , so please review my order number 24635478 and Invoice number 3456 . Since I started doing online shopping I have always preferred your online site to purchase any ethnic and traditional attire , as you have a variety of clothes
,
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and designs to choose from and most importantly the prices are reasonable . I had never faced any issue with any of the clothing that I had bought .
However
,
this
time when I shopped from the site ,
firstly
I had to face issues with putting a proper location and
finally
when I received the ethnic
dress
all the embroidery work done on the
dress
was ripped out and the material was
also
rough from the inside . I had ordered
this
dress
to wear
at
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my friend's wedding that I need to attend next week .
Due to
time
limitation
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, I am unable to arrange for another
dress
, so I would like you to provide me
replacement
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a replacement
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for the same
dress
by next week . Would you be kind enough to take
this
urgent request into consideration ? Hoping for a prompt and positive response. Yours faithfully,
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Coherence & Cohesion
To further enhance your logical structure, consider adding a brief conclusion or summary statement to reinforce your request and express hope for a resolution. This can help round off your letter, making it feel more complete and cohesive.
Coherence & Cohesion
In terms of single idea per paragraph, you've done well. However, you could improve clarity by ensuring that transitions between paragraphs are smooth and that each paragraph flows naturally into the next. Using transitional phrases can help bridge ideas more effectively.
Task Achievement
Your task response is commendable as you've accurately addressed all the points required by the task. To push this further, you could delve deeper into the description of the problem by providing more detailed examples or by explaining more about how the issues with the dress affect its wearability.
Task Achievement
Your writing tone is appropriate for the situation, maintaining a balance between formality and expressing your dissatisfaction. To enhance it further, consider varying your sentence structures to add more sophistication to your writing, while maintaining clarity and readability.
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