The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The given pie chart demonstrates the
utmost
causes Correct word choice
apply
for
worldwide Change preposition
of
land
degradation and the table chart illustrates three different regions of the planet which were affected by it during the year 1990.
Overall
, over - gazing
by animals is the main reason for Correct your spelling
over-grazing
the
Correct article usage
apply
land
degradation and 11.3 % of land
in Oceania is affect
by it which is the most compared to other lands .
Change the form of the verb
affected
To begin
with , 30% and 28 % of world's
total Correct article usage
the world's
land
is degraded by deforestation and over-
cultivation of crops . Correct word choice
apply
Further
, due to
over - grazing
by animals, 35% of Correct your spelling
over-grazing
land
becomes less productive which is the main cause . Apart from these , due to
some other reasons
7% of Add a comma
reasons,
area
of the globe was degraded.
Discussing Add an article
the area
about
the table chart , causes Remove the preposition
apply
such
as cutting of trees and growing excess amount of crops had lead
9.8% and 7.7 % area of Europe to be less productive and it is in high proportion compared to Wrong verb form
led
other
two places. Correct article usage
the other
Furthermore
, a total of 11.3% of land
degraded
in Oceania Add a missing verb
is degraded
due to
over - grazing
of animals. 5% , 23% and 13% is the total degraded Correct your spelling
overgrazing
land
in North America, Europe and Oceania respectively.Submitted by akshayashvi07 on
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