The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts how many shops are closed and open in one nation from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there were the largest amount of stores opened in 2011, and the lowest number were out of the market by 2015. Both the proportion of closing and opening stores experienced some fluctuations. Looking at the diagram in more detail, by the year 2011, there were around 8500 people
wanted
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to break into the market,
while
it halved in the following year. In the beginning two years, there was not a huge difference for those who exited the market, differing by about 200 (6200 and 6000). In 2014, the
numbers
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number
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of shop closures and openings
were
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approaching,
which
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were 6430 and 6330 respectively. We can see that the
quantity
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of possessors significantly plummeted to only 600 and hit
bottom
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in the year 2015,
however
, it bounced back to around 5000 and remained steady. There
were
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the same number of
shopkeeper
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shopkeepers
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as
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in
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2012
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in 2012
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(4000), after that it increased gradually until 2017, and dropped to 3000
at the end
period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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