Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?
Some
people
say that too much attention and too many resource
are given Change to a plural noun
resources
in
the protection of wild Change preposition
to
animals
and birds. It is a global problem in the world or a lot of countries and Uzbekistan too. In our own country created "red
book" and Correct article usage
a "red
this
book write
down a lot of extinct Correct subject-verb agreement
writes
species
and flowers too. Than meaning
Wrong verb form
means
this
"red book" is the red symbol of dangerous
. The Replace the word
danger
governments
create a punishment for people
. Because pouches are hunting to
extinct Change preposition
apply
species
and they declane
Correct your spelling
decline
declare
species
too. But governments
create special areas named barns for this
Correct determiner usage
these
animals
To begin
with
I totally Add a comma
with,
agree
Add the preposition
agree on
agree to
agree with
this
opinion. Forthermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
this
Change the determiner
this animal
these animals
animals
is
part of life and they have a special mission too. Because they are Correct subject-verb agreement
are
chain
of nature,if the Add an article
a chain
animals
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
declane
have Correct your spelling
decline
a
biggest problems in our Change the article
the
life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For example
the
Correct article usage
apply
wolfs
are hygienic Replace the word
wolves
animals
, since they clean the rest of died
Verb problem
the dead
animals
in the forest. Than
the birds-they can help clean a Correct your spelling
Then
lot
gardens or crops from dangerous insects like grasshoppers, dragonflies and seagulls too. The cats are important too, in view of the fact that the Add the preposition
lot of
governments
recommend pet
the cat and when you feel nervous, Wrong verb form
petting
this
process can halp
for your nervous system. After Correct your spelling
help
Rephrase
all the
the
dogs are loyal Correct article usage
apply
animal
Fix the agreement mistake
animals
for
Change preposition
to
people
too. Because they defend our home or flat from crimes. Than
they protect our home when we Replace the word
Then
do
not here
In conclusion,we would protect our Verb problem
are
animals
. Moreover
the Add a comma
Moreover,
governments
will strong protection and pay attention too
, than increase Correct your spelling
to
this
statics of the extinct Correct determiner usage
the
species
. The people
save their domestic animals
too. We gonna
save our big and Wrong verb form
are going to
honor
nature from bad things or pressures. Replace the word
honourable
The nature
is the main part Correct article usage
Nature
our
life.Change preposition
of our
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your opinion on the given topic. It’s essential to directly address the prompt by mentioning if you agree or disagree and why, in a succinct manner.
Task Achievement
Expand on your examples by elaborating on how each animal plays a crucial role in the ecosystem. This will help make your main points more compelling and relevant to the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each centered around a single main idea. This includes having a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This structure helps in enhancing the logical flow of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs. This contributes to the overall coherence of the essay and helps the reader follow your argument more easily. Examples include: 'Moreover', 'In addition', 'For instance', 'Consequently', etc.
General
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and the range of vocabulary used. Avoid repetition of words and phrases, and try to use a variety of expressions to make your essay more engaging and dynamic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite